Today I shot a cloud (opinion on poem please?)?

Hi i like your poem It's kind of dark and scary it sounds like the end of the World. Nice captured, and vivid description of what the writer is trying to portrait to her readers, the flow give sense to your poem, but if you try to rhyme the words in this great poem it will be a great work of art, Rhymes make you remember the words more clearly and are often used to connect thoughts between different lines, sentences or stanzas. Try it some time you might like it , other than that you are a good writer very poetic active, and know how to touch your readers heart. Keep this up, valerie good job. TC.